Hi! I’m happy to help. 🙂
Remember that it is YOUR story, not his. Since he is also a writer, he is going to want to write differently from you, because he as an individual will not write the exact same way that you do.
That in mind, it can also be good to hear a perspective from another writer.
I would try implementing the changes in one copy and not implementing them in another copy.
As time goes on with working on both of them, you’ll find yourself gravitating toward one or the other. One of them will prove to be your favorite, even if it’s just by a little bit.
Trust your instincts, and if you’re not sure what they’re telling you, then just step back and try it both ways. You’ll know what to do. 🙂
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