Writing Smut Dialogue

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Striking the balance between literary and realistic is what makes writing it fun. Here are eight little tricks to play around with for your smut scenes to create that very feeling. 

On the one hand, your dialogue will sound refreshing read out loud, on the other, it’ll be more sophisticated than a transcribed real conversation that would sound tedious on paper.


| trick #1

A dose of subtext makes dialogue come to life instead of stating the obvious. To do that, let your characters observe things (external view) rather than monologue (internal view).

| trick #2

Some italics here and there don’t just add emphasis, but volume. Or rather, emphasis comes through volume. Simple, yet important realization. “But I want you.” — Volume goes up for ‘want’. Vocal characters often get more italics. Treat it like caps lock. 

| trick #3

Picture how speech overlaps. You can employ dashes to indicate that someone stops or gets interrupted by something. Happens when a person moans. A dash is a breath.

| trick #4

Set commas when someone speaks in a slow or chopped up manner, stutters, or repeats something. Hyphens can work in some cases, so do experiment which one works best. The point is to never forget that the comma is your tool to create a pause everywhere, not just for descriptions and subclauses.

| trick #5

If you don’t know what to write asspeech at all while describing actions in bed, chances are you should let them talk about consent first and foremost unless that happened earlier. 

| trick #6 

Besides the oral fixation (he pants, she moans, he groans etc.) where you run out of verbs pretty fast, consider heartbeat, touch, or body temperature (e.g. she sweats) as an option for descriptor particles in dialogue.

| trick #7

If you already ponder using slang, an accent, dialect, any deviation from classic English for a character, do go for it. Always effective when consistent. Repetition helps when a character commits a rather glaring syntactical error, too, that’s how you pull it off. Think Yoda.

| trick #8

Let some speech fragments stand by themselves and omit the occasional ‘,[character] says’. It increases impact and memorability. Sexual confessions are perfect for that.

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